Give me a holiday dream
curling up like coffee steam
from a cup, make that two,
take me back to the person I knew.
Girl in the mirror on the wall,
when did you have your great fall?
Was the grind the uphill climb,
or the downward spiral?
curling up like coffee steam
from a cup, make that two,
take me back to the person I knew.
Girl in the mirror on the wall,
when did you have your great fall?
Was the grind the uphill climb,
or the downward spiral?
One response to “Mirror mirror on the wall”
Strong work…; and, very deeply enchanting. I note this poem is relatively ‘short’…yet, it is very effective, indeed.
Two line rhyming scheme(dream/steam, two/knew, wall/fall, climb/spiral)…that last couplet might not rhyme exactly…; but, it’s definitely connected through sharing a similar thought process…uphill climb/downwards spiral…I guess, ‘up/down’ is the rhyme here.
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You see, I tend to suffer from ADD/Attention Deficit Disorder…which leads to ‘low attention span’. Yet, reading your poetry seems to have me ‘hooked’…with my attention unwavering…that’s a remarkable feat in itself…meaning, I really and truly like it.
My ultimate aim, though…is to be able to learn from you…so, that I can write equally as well.